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Write an essay on the following topic: Some people fail in school, but end up being successful in life. Why do you think that is the case? What is the most important thing to succeed in life? Give your opinion and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience. Write at least 300 words.

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Although
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Despite
 being considered as the fastest
way
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 that leads to
success
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 in
life
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,
education
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 is not everything. In some cases, people can even achieve great
success
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 without having good results at
school
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 because grades do not measure one’s intelligence. Having a good
education
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 does not mean that we will be successful in our adulthood. The main reason for
this
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 case is that one’s interest could be something else apart from the studies,
such
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 as acting, sport, singing, etc. There is a wide range of celebrities in the world that proved, failing in studies is not the end of the road.
For instance
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, the cricket superstar, Sachin Tendulkar did not even complete the
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school but
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school, but
 he is one of the most successful and the richest
sportspersons
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 in his country. Another example
, Bill Gates who
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, Bill Gates, who
 is known as the co-founder of Microsoft Corporation left
school
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 at an early age and became the youngest billionaire in the world. William Shakespeare, an English poet, playwright, and actor,
was said
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were said
 to leave
school
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 when he was 13. People that succeed in
life
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 without having good
education
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 tend to have innate intelligence and drop out of prestigious schools. To have great
success
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 in
life
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, good
education
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 is not enough. Right attitude, determination, willingness to work hard and patience
is
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are
 an important factor which
lead
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leads
 to
success
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. The more effort we put in when doing something, the more
success
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 we can have. Thomas Edison is a living proof of
this
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 claim. Having passed more than 100 failed experiments, he eventually discovers the electricity. His invention made a big contribution to human
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. Steve Jobs, one of the greatest tech Mughals, did not graduate from the university and yet, he changed the
way
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 humans have been communicating in the 21st century. His skills and attitude towards achieving the target made all the difference in his
life
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. To conclude, studying is important
for
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to
 our
success
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 in the
future but
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future, but
 it is not the only
way
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. The key to open the door of
success
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 is ourselves: where there is
will
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a will
, there is a
way
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.
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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