Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justified while others think it is unfair. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

As a result
of constant media attention, sports professionals in my country have become stars and
celebrities
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Celebrities
, and those at the top are paid huge salaries. Just like movie stars, they live
extravagant
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extravagantly
lifestyles
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Lifestyles
with huge houses and cars. Many people find their rewards unfair, especially when comparing these super salaries with those of
top
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Top
surgeons or research scientists, or even leading politicians who have the responsibility of
governing the country
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In governing the country
Governing the country
.
However
, sports salaries are not determined by considering the contribution
to
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To
society a person makes, or the level of responsibility he or she holds.
Instead
, they reflect the
public popularity
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The public popularity
Public popularity
of sport in general and the level of public support that successful stars can
generate
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Generate
. So the notion of ‘fairness’ is not the issue. Those who feel that sports stars’ salaries are justified might argue that the number of professionals
with
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With
real talent are very few, and the money is a recognition of the skills and dedication a person
needs
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Needs
to be successful. Competition is constant and a player is tested every time they perform in
their
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Their
relatively short career. The pressure from the media is intense and there is little privacy out of
the
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The
spotlight. So all of these factors may justify the huge earnings. Personally, I think that the amount of
money
Accept comma addition
money, such
such
sports stars make is more justified than the
huge
take greedily; take more than one's share
hog
earnings
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Earnings
of movie stars, but at the same time, it indicates that our society places more value on
sport
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Sport
than on more essential professions and achievements.
Submitted by Nam Bùi Lương Thành on

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