Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justified while others think it is unfair. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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As a result
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of constant media attention,
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professionals in my country have become
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and celebrities, and those at the top are paid huge
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. Just like movie
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, they live extravagant lifestyles with huge houses and cars. Many people find their rewards unfair, especially when comparing these super
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with those of top surgeons
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research scientists, or even leading politicians who have the responsibility of governing the country.
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,
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salaries
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are not determined by considering the contribution to society a person makes, or the level of responsibility he or she holds.
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, they reflect the public popularity of
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in general and the level of public support that successful
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can generate. So the notion of ‘fairness’ is not the issue. Those who feel that
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are justified might argue that the number of professionals with real talent
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very few, and the money is a recognition of the skills and dedication a person needs to be successful. Competition is constant and a player is tested every time they perform in their relatively short career. The pressure from the media is intense and there is little privacy out of the spotlight. So all of these factors may justify the huge earnings. Personally, I think that the amount of money
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make is more justified than the huge earnings of movie
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, but at the same time, it indicates that our society places more value on
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than on more essential professions and achievements.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial remuneration
  • exceptional
  • merit
  • talent
  • demand
  • entertainment value
  • career span
  • physical demands
  • justified
  • unfair
  • criticism
  • income inequality
  • societal priorities
  • sportsmanship
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