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Scientists predict that all people will choose to talk the same global language in the future. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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A matter of considerable controversy at present is the issue of whether negative or positive, of all people will choose to talk the same global
language
 in the future. Strong arguments exist in support of both sides of
this
 debate, which implies that it is worth examining both points of view before reaching any conclusions.
One
 obvious advantage of have
one
 global
language
 of the
world
 is that people easy communicate with o
ther
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easily
 nations without learning
this
 nations
language
. An ad
ditiona
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nation's
l benefit to the issue is that through the occurrence of
this
 phenomenon, the unemployment rate in the
world
 will significantly reduce. The unemployed go to other countries even today, but their main problem is not knowing the
language
. A good example that springs to my mind here is that students can study in another country very easy. Students spend their main part of time to learn foreign
language
. If it is only
one
language
 in the
world
, the spend their time to learn sciences related to their field,
this
 help to them for will b
e ma
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helps
s
te
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with
r of their sphere.
Finally
, the idea of that there are many languages in the
world
 should not
also
 be neglected as it adds more weight in support of the argument.
Nonetheless
, there is
one
 very convincing point against the all people will cho
ose the same global
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all the people will
language
.
For instance
 a
further
 common criticism of that some nation’s national traditions will lost
as a result
 of for
gett
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lose
ing some languages, with the opponents pointing out to the if it is only
one
language
, it will be very difficult for some part of population namely bombe
rs since t
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the population
hey use only their native
language
 during their life. As shown above, there is no easy answer to
this
 question. On balance,
however
 I tend to belie
ve that i
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however, I
t is very beneficial for community if it will be
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the community
one
 global
language
.
Submitted by Обиджон Одилжонова on

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