In Britain, when someone gets old they often go to live in a home with other old people where there are nurses to look after them. Sometimes the government has to pay for this care.

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of all, let me say that it's
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a good and effective idea that elderly people can be taken care in places like those. Especially if they are alone or their children cannot visit them regularly. They can spend their time with people in their age and
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they need some special health cares that are available in those places. But about the question that who should pay for them, I think it totally depends.
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elderly people have children who can afford the payments or maybe they themselves have
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a fund of money put by as a reserve
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and can pay it. In
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case I think it would be better that
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government
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the government
spends the money for something else. Like social issues, hunger, poverty, unemployment and etc. It's very effective and philanthropic that elderly people
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Notify
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if they do not need to be paid by
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government
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the government
. But
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, there are old people who don't have any child to pay for these sort of social services or their children can not afford them. In
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case the
government
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has to pay for them and give them the chance to receive those services. It's
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government duty
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a government duty
and every elderly person has the right to have access to these services as a citizen. Cause they have worked in their youth and had a part in the prosperity of their country, so it's not fair to leave them to spend their golden years hardly. In conclusion, I think that social places like that mentioned in the question should be supported by
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overall.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Aging population
  • Elderly care
  • Nursing homes
  • Social welfare
  • Intergenerational responsibility
  • Caregiving
  • Financial burden
  • Quality of life
  • Pension funds
  • Healthcare policy
  • Taxation
  • Subsidies
  • Private insurance
  • Long-term care
  • Sustainability
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