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Alcohol abuse is spreading all over the world nowadays. There are many problems and solutions for this habit.

#alcohol #abuse #world #habit
There are many problems
for
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of
alcohol
 abuse
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 One of its problems is
medical problem
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a medical problem
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 When we talk about
this
 problem we can see that
this
 bad
habit
 harm the health
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For instance
, the people who drink
alcohol
 have heart
,
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,
 stomach
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 and mind diseases
.
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In
addition medical
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addition, medical
 problems
,
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 we can find social problem
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when
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When
 we talk about social problems
,
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 we can mention to poverty
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,
 crimes
.
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For example
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,
 the person who drinks
alcohol
 need a lot of money
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 so he can steal or kill to get it
.
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Although
, there are a lot of problems, we can find many solutions for
this
habit
.
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 Media and Education have a big role to make
this
habit
 disappear
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 Our media should make healthy programs and advertisement to teach those people that
alcohol
 is very dangerous
on
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to
for
 their health
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Also
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 we can add some lessons in our school books about
this
 topic
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 These lessons will make the child recognize that
alcohol
 harmful matter because it can hurt his body
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 Our children
also
 will know that they should stay
alcohol
 out of their life all the time
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 In conclusion
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,
 there are many problems and solutions to
alcohol
 abuse
.
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we
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We
 should avoid
this
 bad
habit
 because it is very harmful
.
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 Our world has many solutions to keep it away from us
.
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.
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