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Nowadays, Internet is very development. It can help people to anything

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Nowadays, the Internet is playing an important role in over modern life.
However
, every coin has two sides and we can find out the pros and cons of the Internet by my following bereavement The main advantages of using the Internet are, the faster communication than any other devices and it is an instant process. And it is accessible all over the world so everyone across the world can be in a single place and can solve out a problem.
Secondly
, the Internet is a source of knowledge. All kinds of information is present in it.
Thus
, it is easily accessed and can be search more to get more additional knowledge,
such
 as educations, government laws, market sales, etc.
In addition
, the internet has become a part of education. Education like home schooling is easier and teachers can upload their teaching videos on the Internet which is helpful for all students.
Finally
, using the Internet is the most popular form of entertainment. Movies, videos, sing, etc. Are available in the Internet for free.
Besides
, social networking is
also
 possible using the Internet.
Hence
, there are tons of entertainment that are available online in the Internet. Whether using the Internet how good, it will
also
 have drawbacks.
To begin
 with, the information crucial to us or any important files can be easily taken by the hackers. And there is no exact proof for the security of the details we store like account number, passwords etc.
Hence
, sensitive information must be carefully stored by the people.
Secondly
, the unnecessary emails, advertisements etc. Sometimes are said to be spam because they have the ability to slow down the system and makes the users to face lots of problems. Spam makes the people get more confused since important emails are
also
 stored along with spam.
Moreover
, the malware or virus threats are so deadly that affects the system to a greater extend. It immediately deletes all important files and
finally
 the system ends up being crashed.
Finally
, the people using internet often will forget the difference between virtual and real world.
This
 causes the people to get depressed quickly and it leads to social isolation and obesity problems.
Although
 it has many benefits for
mod
Suggestion
to
ern society. If you are addicted to using the Internet, find ways to limit it as it will not bring you anything good
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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