Nowadays many countries have very cosmopolitan cities with people from all over the world. How can the government ensure that all these people can live together harmoniously?

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In today's cosmopolitan
world
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it is unusual to find a major city or
country
where there are no immigrants.
People
travel more now than they ever did in the past and populations have had to adapt to
this
transitional lifestyle much more quickly than in the past. Ultimately society, as a group of individuals, directs the way that new arrivals in a
country
are treated. But the government can do a number of things to support
this
.
Firstly
, all governments should insist that schools teach history and
culture
from more than one
country
, not just the home nation. By learning how others have lived we gain insight into alternative cultures and ways of life which makes us more accepting when we meet
people
from those countries. Of
course
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we don't have time to learn about the history of every
country
in the world but understanding at least one other
culture
opens our minds and makes us more tolerant.
In addition
, when immigrants choose to settle in a
country
, the host government should offer free language and
culture
lessons. It is impossible for new arrivals to integrate if they do not understand the language and habits of their new home. I believe it is important for immigrants to learn the
culture
of the place they have chosen to settle. By acquiring the language and knowledge about the
culture
, they will be able
integrate
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more easily and comfortably without necessarily losing their own identity.
Finally
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the governments of countries should make sure that they have some stringent laws to protect
people
from aggression or prejudice so that, should an immigrant face terrible attitudes, they have some protection. By ensuring
people
feel safe the host
country
shows that it is civilized and promotes integration. In summary, understanding others is the key to harmonious living but laws should
also
be in place to protect
people
from those who can't behave responsibly.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cosmopolitan
  • inclusive policies
  • cultural exchange
  • integration
  • community centers
  • anti-discrimination
  • awareness campaigns
  • support systems
  • diversity
  • equal opportunities
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