Nowadays celebrities are more famous for their glamour and wealth rather than for their achievements, and this sets a bad example to young people. To What extent do you agree or disagree?
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personalites
the complex of all the attributes--behavioral, temperamental, emotional and mental--that characterize a unique individual
personalities
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hard work, passion
hard work passion
feild
for realization of their a piece of land cleared of trees and usually enclosed
field
feed
fields
achivement
the action of accomplishing something
achievement
achievements
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indentify
, the struggle and recognize as being; establish the identity of someone or something
identify
achivements
of these well known peoplethe action of accomplishing something
achievements
achievement
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demotivate
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sportsperson
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skillful
having or showing knowledge and skill and aptitude
skilful
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persitent
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persistent
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youth recognises sportsmen just for Accept space
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advertisements
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thought process of youth has changed Linking Words
pessimistcally
to an extent that they have started with pessimism; in a pessimistic manner
pessimistically
beliving
that to become the cognitive process that leads to convictions
believing
sucessful
having succeeded or being marked by a favorable outcome
successful
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one needs to have prosperity and physical appearance. Accept space
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young people involve themselves in the Accept space
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activites
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activities
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outerlook
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outer look
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consumption
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the consumption
steriods
so as to make body changesany of several fat-soluble organic compounds having as a basis 17 carbon atoms in four rings; many have important physiological effects
steroids
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dignataries
are being acknowledged for their bank balance and appearancean important or influential (and often overbearing) person
dignitaries
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strenous
work which is potential hazard for youngsters and followerscharacterized by or performed with much energy or force
strenuous
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