The average standard of people's health is likely to be lower in the future than it is now. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Health is an extremely important aspect

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one's life. Unfortunately, with the increasing demand for fast

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chains and unhealthy snack, it appears that the average standard of people's health might deteriorate in the future. In 1990's, the way that families would celebrate special events or reunite is by cooking and bonding over homemade hot meals. Nowadays, people have gone out of their traditional ways by eating more outside of their homes. The fast

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industry has seen more growth than ever as it has been part mostly of everyone's life. It is more convenient, especially for families with kids as most chains offer value meals where you can get a bit of everything for a cheaper price. There has been an increase of various kinds of eateries as well like delis, diners, cafeterias and drive-in restaurants which have been popular especially for younger adults. Full-time workers find

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type of

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places time-saving as more stand-alone and quick-lunch counters are available near their workplaces.

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, behind all of these advantages are the facts that most people are putting their health at risk too. Most of the desired restaurants are using processed ingredients which may contain additives that are bad if consumed too much. Not all people who patronize

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chains

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are fit and exercise regularly which have resulted in the increasing percentage of kids and adults being obese. Some have

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been too dependent on

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type of

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that it has increased their sugar level, causing them to have diabetes at a young age. Ultimately, people might find it convenient to eat fast

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food but

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food, but

they should

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monitor the

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they are taking in and put more effort to balance the nutrients that they need to be able to live a healthy lifestyle.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

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Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

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Task Achievement: 4.0

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296 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

1. Standard of health
2. Average
3. Lower
4. Future
5. Aging population
6. Chronic diseases
7. Sedentary lifestyle
8. Lack of exercise
9. Poor dietary habits
10. Environmental pollution
11. Technological advancements
12. Impact on health

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