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The amount of time spend on sport and exercise should be increased in school in order to tackle the problem of overweight children? Do you think this the best way to deal with the problem? What other solutions can you suggest?

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The
cat
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 (Felis catus) is a domestic
species
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 of small carnivorous mammal.[1
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[2] It is the only domesticated
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 in the family Felidae and is often referred to as the domestic
cat
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 to distinguish it from the wild members of the family.[4] A
cat
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 can either be a house
cat
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, a farm
cat
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 or a feral
cat
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; the latter ranges freely and avoids human contact.[5] Domestic cats are valued by humans for companionship and their ability to hunt rodents. About 60
cat
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 breeds are recognized by various
cat
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 registries.[6] The
cat
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 is similar in anatomy to the other
felid
a piece of land cleared of trees and usually enclosed
field
species
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: it has a
strong flexible
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strong, flexible
 body, quick reflexes, sharp teeth and retractable claws adapted to killing small prey. Its night vision and sense of smell are well developed.
Cat
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 communication includes vocalizations like meowing, purring, trilling, hissing, growling and grunting as well as
cat
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-specific body language. It is a solitary
hunter but
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hunter, but
 a social
species
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. It can hear sounds too faint or too high in frequency for human ears,
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 as those made by mice and other small mammals. It is a predator
that is
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 most active at dawn and dusk.[7] It secretes and perceives pheromones.[8]
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • obesity
  • physical education
  • teamwork
  • discipline
  • nutrition education
  • healthy eating habits
  • balanced meals
  • junk food
  • parental involvement
  • community initiatives
  • fitness programs
  • government policies
  • subsidies
  • multi-dimensional approach
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