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The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.

The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.
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The charts illustrate the proportion of
water
 consumed for various aims in six different areas –North America, South America,
Europe
, Africa, Central
Asia
 and South East
Asia
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Overall
, what stands out from the graph
that
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while
 Central
Asia
register
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 the most proportion of
water
 consumed for agriculture,
Europe
 witness the least percentage of
water
 used for it.
Further
,
water
 used for industrial in
Europe
 is more
popuar
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popular
then
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than
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any
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 other
areas
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. As can be seen from the graph, the used
water
rate
 for agriculture in
the
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Central
Asia
 come top in
rankings
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 with just under 90%, followed by Africa which has a
rate
 of 84%. South East
Asia
rank
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third
 with 81%.
Moreover
, the lowest proportion of
water
 consumed
for
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 it is experienced by
Europe
, which stands at slightly above 30%.
On the other hand
,
Europe
show
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 the most popular
rate
 of
water
 used for industrial.
This
rate
 in
Erupe
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Europe
drop
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 sharply in Central
Asia
 from approximately 55% to 5%.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stands" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • irrigation
  • domestic
  • industrial
  • regional disparity
  • economic structure
  • sustainable management
  • water-scarce
  • population density
  • urbanization
  • data trends
  • resource allocation
  • percentage distribution
  • extremes
  • variations
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