in the future, it seems more difficult to live on the earth. some people think more money should be spent on researching other planet to live, such as mars. to what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement

Nowadays, government and environmental developers have been working hard to determine the best budget allocation mix, improving
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on the earth and researching other
planets
. I completely disagree with
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of spending more money on exploring other
planets
than doing for
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.
It is clear that
zone exploration has been and will always be extortionately expensive
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both labour and resources. First , If distance exploration were to be a main focus,
this
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recruiting more scientists and administrative staff.
For instance
, the salaries paid to astronomers and researchers are highest among industries, which would
also
add to the deficit. Second , in order to conduct various
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a lot of experiments and
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objects into space for the purpose of finding other
planets
,
therefore
location-exploration projects always consume a number of resources,
such
as oil or metals. In fact, NASA, National Aeronautics and
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Administration
,
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consume one hundred million dollars every year, which
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that there would be less input to develop other industries and grow economically. Another compelling
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that the chance of finding other
planets
is slim and even if the humans succeeded, it would still be impossible to move on there.
Firstly
, since distances between the
planets
and dust are vast, citizens must pay a big amount of money to
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to that planet. In fact, it would take millions of years for the man-made slot craft to reach the nearest star, by which time all humans could no longer exist.
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should not ignore the problems on
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globe, which directly impact
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all species living on the globe,
such
as climate change or
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effect.
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, climate change should top the list since
this
can cause a lot of types of cancers in the near future. In conclusion,
although
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reasonably,
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I still believe that improving
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on the planet is more important because of the above-mentioned reasons.
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