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some people think that international car free days are an effective way of reducing air pollution,however others think there are other ways.discuss both views and give your opinion

#people #car #air #pollution
While some people think that international
car
 free days is effectively reduce
air
pollution
,
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,
others believe that there are many ways help
reducing
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to reduce
air
pollution
instead
 of adopting
car
 free days.From my point of view, it will get better when we improve other solutions
instead
 of focus on the international
car
 free days. On the
one
 hand that international
car
 free days
is
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are
one
 of the ways reduce level atmosphere problems.
the
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The
 most
compellimg
driving or forcing
compelling
 reason for holding to my view is that
car
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the car
a car
 is necessary in everyone’s move. But it
also
 the main causes of increase level
realtively
in a relative manner; by comparison to something else
relatively
 high proportion of pollutants and traffic jam every
day
.International
car
 free
day
 is suggested to encourage
use
 of public transport or using hybrid
motobike
small motorcycle with a low frame and small wheels and elevated handlebars
motorbike
istead
in place of, or as an alternative to
instead
Istead
 of using
prive
the property of having material worth (often indicated by the amount of money something would bring if sold)
price
private
car
.Example, when people move by bike is
also
one
 of ways not only reduce emission toxic fumer
,
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,
but
also
 help people can do exercises.
However
,
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,
daily routine is affected by no
car
 days, moving
in
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at
this
 time will be
more difficulty
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more difficult
 than every
day
.In fact
,
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,
people using too much public transports in a
day
also
 overloaded public transports.
On the other hand
,
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,
government
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the government
 suggested many solutions to protect the environment
instead
 of only focusing on no
car
day
.
Firstly
, government should invest money in public transports and provide incentives for users of
this
 to encourage users.Especially should invest in facilities so that people feel comfortable using as well as the increase in
car
 prices
also
 reduces people’s
use
 of cars.
Moreover
,
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,
the
air
poluttion
undesirable state of the natural environment being contaminated with harmful substances as a consequence of human activities
pollution
 comes not only from personal
vehicles but
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vehicles, but
also
 from some people’s habits
such
 as using chemicals
,
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,
burning trash,…..The government should introduce laws to limit
pollution
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pollution, such
such
 as
green tax
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green taxes
a green tax
,.. The application international
car
 free days have their own advantages and disadvantages.
in
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In
 my opinion
,
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,
there are many solutions popular than and brings much better results.If only
one
day
 does not
use
 cars every year
,
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,
but other days cars still used so the problems of
air
pollution
 are still not tacked.
Instead we
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Instead, we
 should encourage people to
use
 environmentally friendly means to limit
pollution
. Conclusion
,
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,
we should come up with more effective solutions
instead
 of relying on no cars.
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