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In many modern societies, grandchildren rarely spend any quality time with their grandparents. What do you think are the consequences of this ?

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In the modern world, many people prefer to live without grandparents, and someone moves to big cities, leaving them alone. Unfortunately, there are those who simply send them to a nursing home. Of course,
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, without living with grandparents, grandchildren lose the opportunity to learn more about the traditions and customs that pass from generation to generation.
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,
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 will lead to the loss of cultures and heritage of some families.
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, attention and love, which grandchildren take from grandparents no one can give
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 can help their formation.
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, many psychologists say that three generations should not live in the same house and that
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 can negatively manifest. Unfortunately, or maybe not, many people agree with
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, because they believe that grandchildren will develop and keep up to date better than if they take an instance from grandparents and traditions. It seems to me that everything is individual. Whether it is worth living together or not, positively or negatively it will turn out on raising children.
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, I think that
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 is not right to deprive grandparents and grandchildren of the opportunity to pastime.
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, people sending their elderly parents to a nursing home against their will,
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 is a terrible example for the younger generation. In conclusion, pastime grandchildren with grandparents can be both negative and positive.
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 that, it seems to me that communication with all family members is important.
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