Some people hold that children do not get as much attention from their parents as children did in the past. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Currently, an increasing number of people are concerned about

children

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child

care

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, some people argue that parents pay less attention to their kids than

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the previous time

previous times

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, I

am agree

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agree

with

this

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opinion, there are few reasons how does it caused.

First

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of all

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the cost of living is likely to be much higher. Parents should pay

more higher price

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a higher price

higher price

higher prices

highest price

of clothing, food

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housing and school education, it makes them work

more harder

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harder

more hard

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, the social competition is

intensely

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intensifying

intense

intensified

intensive

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, there are a large number of candidates to apply for one position, people are under great pressure, they have to

spent

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spend

substantial energy into job skills which

cause

look over, usually with the intention to rob

case

them

people in general

they

may not have more power to take

care

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of kids, give

advise

a proposal for an appropriate course of action

advice

kids

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kids'

homework.

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, another reason is that overuse of

internet

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the internet

. When parents have

free

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more free

time

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, they always spent it on social networking sites,

such

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as Facebook

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Twitter, Instagram, or watch some videos from TikTok, YouTube. While the parents spent leisure

time

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on the internet

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it means they have

lack

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a lack

time

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to spend with

kids

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the kids

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, In the past,

instead

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of working mothers are

remained

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remaining

at home to look after their children and take

care

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of domestic work, nowadays women

also

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have equal access to enter the workforce, on the one hand

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encourage

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encourages

mothers to find employment, but

on the other hand

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, it makes children with less

care

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. In conclusion, from my perspective today children did not get enough attention from their parents, to consider about children’s development, parents should spend more

time

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with their kids.

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Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

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Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

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261 words

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