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Some people say that tourism has many negative effects on the countries that people travel to. How true is the statement? What can tourists do to reduce the harmful effects of tourism on local cultures and environments?

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Recently,
Tourism
has been developing
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has developed
 in many countries. Some people consider that it has plenty of negative effects on the countries people visit to. I agree that the
place
 swarmed by tourists has many issues
such
 as increasing local food price and lack of infrastructure. One of the negative effects of
tourism
on
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in
 the countries is that tourist destinations has not a sufficient infrastructure, which means that the population of those
place
density
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densities
 is not higher than big cities, and when they confront with the influx of tourists visiting
place
 certain months of the year, residents living long-term those
place
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places
 could be impacted negatively their social life and environment. For
this
 reason, they ought to visit different
months which
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months, which
 the places are not crowded to reduce harmful impacts of
tourism
 on local cultures and environments.
Therefore
, there might be balanced population density against the negative effect of
tourism
. The other harmful impact of
tourism
 on the countries is that the food and
services prices
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services, prices
 could be dramatically increased as demand for those rises, which occur economical/livelihood problem
on
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of
for
with
 local people.
For example
, local shops often increase the price since knowing that consumption rises significantly in
tourism
 seasons. Local people cannot afford against the increased prices.
As a result
, they are likely to become poor due to the negative effect of
tourism
. I think tourists play an important role to decrease price there. Whey they report
this
 issue to
government
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the government
, local shop owners are exposed to decrease prices. With
this
 method, the negative impact of
tourism
 can be reduced. To conclude, the harmful effects of
tourism
 result
from
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of
 rising prices in
local market
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the local market
 and having lack of infrastructure in holiday destination. Tourists can solve those problems by reporting
highest prices
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the highest prices
to
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for
 government and visiting there in off-seasons.
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