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Modern forms of communication such as email and messaging have reduced the amount of time people spend seeing their friends. This has had a negative effect on their social lives. To what extend do you agree and disagree?

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The development of technology has deeply changed the means of communication in the
last
 few decades. While individuals used letters to send a message, they now use
internet
Suggestion
the internet
 and telephone based means. Some people believe that it is too time-consuming, and it results in poor socializing. I think
this
 situation may have both positive and negative sides on people’s social lives.
To begin
 with, people communicate with each other effortlessly, and use them to enhance their
life
 quality. They can meet old friends or make new friends on the internet. In the past, people used more complicated methods like fax or letter which were costly and took time to arrive at the final destination.
In addition
, current methods of communication save us extra time for our private
life
 in order to socialize with more people.
For example
,
elders
Suggestion
the elders
 had to go to the post office to send a simple letter, and shipping took 5-6 days in the former times.
However
, an employer can do all that thing within a few minutes these days. So?
(
Accept space
(
Explain its benefit in our social
life
 here.)
On the other hand
, present types of communication cause an addiction, especially among teens. Communication devices which are presumably cell phone and computer create a
life
 on the screen. People keep in contact with people on the internet
instead
 of talking face to face with other people who are sitting right near them.
For instance
, it is common that when close relatives meet, they usually sit in a place and prefer to send messages to another friend. So what is the harm? Emphasize that. To sum up, it is obvious that the developments in the world improve and make it
easy
Suggestion
easier
 to communicate with everyone. I disagree that they keep in touch with all status of people, even though they have some minor acceptable bad sides.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • modern forms of communication
  • email
  • messaging
  • reduce
  • amount of time
  • see friends
  • social lives
  • technology
  • communication
  • faster
  • convenient
  • stay in touch
  • connect
  • online
  • social media platforms
  • meet new people
  • face-to-face interactions
  • maintain relationships
  • excessive reliance
  • social isolation
  • digital communication
  • emotional depth
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