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Happiness is considered very important in life. Why is it difficult to define? What factors are important in achieving happiness? Given reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Happiness
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 is very difficult to define, because it means so many different things to different people. While some people link
happiness
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 to wealth and material success, others think it lies in emotions and loving personal relationships. Yet others think that spiritual paths, rather than either the material world or relationships with people, are the only way to true
happiness
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. Because people interpret
happiness
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 for themselves in so many different ways, it is difficult to give any definition
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 true for everyone.
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, if there are different kinds of
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 for different i
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individuals, then
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 step in achieving it would be to have a degree of self-knowledge. A person needs to know who he or she is before being able to know what it is that makes him or her happy. Of course, factors
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 as loving relationships, good health, the skills to earn a living and a peaceful environment all contribute to our
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 too. But
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 does not mean that people without these conditions cannot be happy. Overall, I think an ability to keep clear perspectives in life is a more essential factor in achieving
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. By that I mean an ability to have a clear sense of what is important in our lives (the welfare of our families, the quality of our relationships, making other people happy, etc.) a
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what is not (a problem at work, getting annoyed about trivial things, etc.) Like self-awareness,
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 very difficult to achieve, but I think these are the two factors that may be the most important for achieving
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