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Countries should provide enough food for their own people and therefore lessen exportation of food abroad, if needed. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Recently, many countries are exporting
food
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 products to other nations, while their own citizens are in need of it. Some people argue that selling
food
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 products to other countries should be minimized. I totally agree that the government should cut down the
food
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 exportation level to provide
food
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 to the poor people and to boost our the
economy
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. There are several reasons why
food
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 should not be exported if there is a shortage in the local country. One of the main reasons is to provide
food
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 to the citizens who cannot able to afford it. Every country has their own poverty level and there will be thousands of people starving for a meal every day. The government should take
actions
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action
 to give those excess
food
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 products, which are exported, to the poor, which are to be exported.
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, India exports rice to developed countries, while so many local children and adults are in need of it. If those rice products are given to the poor citizens, it will help them to lead a healthy life without hunger. The other reason is to enhance our
economy
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 by selling those
food
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 items internally. The local farmers who are in need of money sell their farmed
food
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 products to developed nations to get a high income. Since, the prize price for those
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 products is high in those countries.
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 results in domestic inflation of prize prices for those
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 items because of scarcity, which produces negative effects to our
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.
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, many farmers in India exported onions to nearby nations, when there was only less number an insufficient amount of onions to buy in their own country.
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, the price of onions increased massively, which
inturnin
an anticipated outcome that is intended or that guides your planned actions
intention
 turn affected India’s
economy
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. In conclusion, after
analyzing
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analysing
 the benefits of cutting down the exportation of
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; in my opinion, it is essential that the government to look after their own citizens rather than trading it. I believe it assists their country’s
economy
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 to grow and to help the poor people, who are in need of
food
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.
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