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As mass communication and transport continue to grow, societies are becoming more and more alike leading to a phenomenon known as globalisation. Some people fear that globalisation will inevitably lead to the total loss of cultural identity. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Nowadays, many aspects of our lives significantly changed,
such
 as transportation and mass communication.
As a result
, some people believe that over time, people begin to lose their cultural identity, due to a paradox known as
globalisation
.
This
 essay is going to analyse
this
 dilemma by using examples to demonstrate the points.
To begin
 with,
globalisation
 could lead to people’s realisation of how they are different from individuals in other countries.
Therefore
, it could have a cast amount of positive consequences of people’s culture.
For example
, learning another language, unique local cuisine, and so on.
As a result
, some unusual cultures may become popular worldwide due to the phenomenon.
Moreover
, information becomes more available by virtue of the
globalisation
.
In other words
, the “trade” of important information
such
 as scientific researches, technologies, and so on may tackle a problem with misunderstanding and lead to a more tolerant society.
For instance
, sharing knowledge between nations will help the developing countries to grow faster and improve their economies.
As a result
, it has been suggested that nations may not only save their culture, language, and traditions, but
also
 share them with the rest of the world.
On the other hand
, despite all the advantages, there is a crucial disadvantage.
Thus
, the paradox could cause the labour movement when workers from a less developed country move to a more developed.
Hence
,
this
 can have serious consequences not only for the population and economy, but
also lead
Suggestion
also leads
 to the disappearance of the whole civilisation. To conclude,
globalisation
 is a fundamental change in the world with political, economical, and cultural implementation.
However
, I disagree with the statement, because the proper control of
this
 phenomenon, may have some positive consequences for the culture as a whole.
Submitted by dseg on

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