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Some people are of the opinion that there should be a car-free day once every month, on which no private vehicles are allowed on the road. Discuss the advantages and possible disadvantages.

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It's
 argued that to have better salary remuneration you should have adequate
qualifications but
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qualifications, but
also
 know how of the job is equally important for well paid jobs
This
 essay will throw light on both approaches that will lead to have lofty paid jobs. In my opinion gaining maturity along with academic qualification is the right approach to get
highly rewarded career
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a highly rewarded career
.
To begin
 with accomplished individuals are preferred by the recruiter because they have expertise know how to tackle the problem which is lacking in fresh university
graduates
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graduates, however
however
 competent personnel are
also
 economically beneficial for the company
for
example they
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example, they
 can bring in their existing customer or utilize their accumulated information in the past to help
company
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companies
the company
 overcome similar obstacles.
This
 means that they are deserved to be paid high enough compared to a fresh candidate with regard to foreseen economic gains
However
 Many educational institutes are providing
best
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the best
 level of training to students for their career which make them to qualify for better jobs with competitive pay
.
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.
example candidates from premium institute renumarated highly becau
se for their kn
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career, although
o
wle
the thing named or in question
it
dge and new techniques
such
 as communication skills which they can introduce for growth of company in comparison to matured employees which lack the knowledge and modern art In conclusion real world experience seems best way to enhance the career
although
 its should be backed up with university qualifications
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