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Some people are of the opinion that being highly qualified is the only way to ensure a well-paying job. While others believe that having work experience is the best way to get a well-paying job. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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It is argued that to have a better salary remuneration one should have adequate qualifications, but
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 In my opinion, gaining maturity along with academic qualification is the right approach to get a highly rewarded career.
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 essay will throw light on both approaches that will lead to have lofty paid jobs.
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 with, accomplished individuals are preferred by the recruiter because they have expertise know - how to tackle the problem which is lacking in fresh university graduates.
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, competent personnel are
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 economically beneficial for the organization.
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, employees can bring in their existing customer or utilize their accumulated information in the past to help the company overcome similar obstacles.
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 means that they are deserved to be paid high enough compared to a fresh candidate with regard to foreseen economic gains.
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, many educational institutes are providing the best level of training to students for their career which make them qualify for better work opportunities with competitive pay.
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, candidates from premium institutes
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 highly because of their knowledge and new techniques
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 as communication skills, technical skills and practical skills which they can introduce for growth of the corporation in comparison to matured employees which lack the knowledge and modern art. In conclusion, real world experience seems the best way to enhance the career,
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 it should be backed up with university qualifications.
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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Highly qualified
  • Well-paying job
  • Securing
  • Knowledge
  • Expertise
  • Higher positions
  • Higher salaries
  • Practical skills
  • Real-world setting
  • Employers value
  • Professional connections
  • Ideal
  • Industry
  • Job role
  • Opinion
  • Experience
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