the chart below shows the amount of leisure time enjoyed by men and women of different employment status. write a report.
The given bar chart illustrates the weekly entertainment period (in hours)
that is
enjoyed by five different working groups based on their sex, during 1998-99.
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Overall
, the jobless and the Linking Words
post retirement
categories of people showed a maximum number of enjoyable hours. The men are ahead of women in all the groups except the housewives and Add a hyphen
post-retirement
part
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part-time
time
workers that Use synonyms
does
not have any male representation.
Change the verb form
do
To begin
with the unemployed and retired people made the best use of their leisure Linking Words
time
in terms of joy. These figures were 80 Use synonyms
hrs
/Use synonyms
week
for males and 78 Use synonyms
hrs
/Use synonyms
week
for females in both Use synonyms
the
categories.
It was followed by the housewives who could manage to enjoy 50 Correct article usage
apply
hrs
in every Use synonyms
week
. Use synonyms
This
group was obviously reserved for Linking Words
the
females only.
Amongst the rest of the two groups I.e. those working Correct article usage
apply
full
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full-time
time
or part-Use synonyms
time
, the number of enjoyment hours for females remained almost closer to 40hrs/Use synonyms
week
. Use synonyms
Whereas
in Linking Words
Correct article usage
the full
full
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full-time
time
job category, Use synonyms
this
figure was 45hrs/Linking Words
week
for men. But surprisingly enough, the men did not have any representation amongst the Use synonyms
part
Add a hyphen
part-time
time
jobbers.Use synonyms
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