the chart below shows the amount of leisure time enjoyed by men and women of different employment status. write a report.

the chart below shows the amount of leisure time enjoyed by men and women of different employment status.

write a report.
The given bar chart illustrates the weekly entertainment period (in hours)
that is
enjoyed by five different working groups based on their sex, during 1998-99.
Overall
, the jobless and the
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categories of people showed a maximum number of enjoyable hours. The men are ahead of women in all the groups except the housewives and
part
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time
workers that
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not have any male representation.
To begin
with the unemployed and retired people made the best use of their leisure
time
in terms of joy. These figures were 80
hrs
/
week
for males and 78
hrs
/
week
for females in both
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categories. It was followed by the housewives who could manage to enjoy 50
hrs
in every
week
.
This
group was obviously reserved for
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females only. Amongst the rest of the two groups I.e. those working
full
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time
or part-
time
, the number of enjoyment hours for females remained almost closer to 40hrs/
week
.
Whereas
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time
job category,
this
figure was 45hrs/
week
for men. But surprisingly enough, the men did not have any representation amongst the
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time
jobbers.
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