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The line graph compares the percentage of watcher in terms of
TV
 and
radio
 in the UK from October to December 1992. Overall, both of figures experienced
different trend
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a different trend
 in
time period
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the time period
. While most people
listened
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listened to radio
radio
 in the morning, the percentage of people watched
TV
 in the evening. There are more people who watch
TV
 than there were listening to the
radio
. As the graph shows, UK’s
TV
 watcher figure started at
fewer
Suggestion
less
 than 10%
at
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in
 1.00 am.
This
 situation
remain
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remains
 a stable until at 5.00
pm
,
then
 the figure of
TV
 witnessed a dramatic increase
at
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of
 approximately 45% around 9
pm
, afterwards, there was a slight decrease in audiences by under 20%
at
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in
 11.00
pm
.
Likewise
, the proportion of listeners to the
radio
 began fewer than 5%
at
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in
 1.00am.
This
 process remained constant until 6.00pm. After
this
, the percentage of listeners
experiences
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experience
 a sharp increase almost 30%
at
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in
 9.00pm, before the figure of the
radio
 fluctuated in a steady drop nearly 5% at the end of the day.
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