You recently organised an all-day meeting for your company, which took place ina local hotel. In their feedback, participants at the meeting said that they liked the hotel,but they were unhappy about the food that was served for lunch. Write a letter to the manager of the hotel. In your letter • say what the participants liked about the hotel •explain why they were unhappy about the food • suggest what the managee should do to improve the food in the future.

Dear Sir/Madam I am formally writing
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letter to inform you about our
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feedback regarding
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the hotel facilities and food services. The hotel was perfectly fine.
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, there are some complaints about the foods that
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been served. Let me explain in more
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. Almost all of the participants were fascinated by the classical architecture of the hotel.
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, the room that we occupied for the meeting was designed just like the way we wanted it.
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, the food that has been served was quite disappointing especially the roast chicken. It was not roasted properly.
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, the blood was still visible and resulted
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foul
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smell. I would highly suggest to the
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, especially the kitchen staff, should recheck the
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food before serving it to
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guest
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. They may request for a new roaster machine in which
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available in the
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, in order for them to roast the chicken properly and fast. Thank you in advance. Yours faithfully,
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