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Currently there is a trend towards the use of alternative forms of medicine. However, at best these methods are ineffective, and at worst they may be dangerous. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

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In the
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 decades, people have become more prone to
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 different therapeutic methods,
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 these have not been officially approved by drugs authorities.
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 trend undoubtedly entails some issues and the question inevitably arises as to whether these new treatments are safe. Some experts object to the
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 of alternative medicine, arguing that taking substances that have feasibly no efficacy may
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 people’s health and might induce some patients to interrupt their original therapy. They believe their
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 should be avoided as much as possible since they have not undergone a process of examination as commercial drug, in order to be aware of their potential adverse effects.
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, they could only be permitted if they were proved to be safe after standardised tests of efficacy.
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, other people argue that there would be no point
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 denying alternative therapies if patients were informed about the real limits of these. Those who support
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 view content that each individual has the right to decide how to be cured, even using
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 methods. In their opinion, herbs, officinal and homeopathic drugs should be allowed as long as the user is well informed.
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, they would argue that there is an important aspect to consider, the placebo effect, that can
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relief, numerous
 mild conditions without recurring to a standard drug. To sum up,
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 these alternative treatments could be ineffective and, in some case, dangerous, people should have the possibility to decide whether to
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 or not, provided that they have known their benefits and drawbacks.
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