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The graph below shows the proportion of four different materials that were recycled from 1982 to 2010 in a particular country.

The graph below shows the proportion of four different materials that were recycled from 1982 to 2010 in a particular country.
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A glance at the line
graph
 provided delineates the comparative data of the proportion of recycling the various type of materials,
such
 as
paper
,
glass
,
aluminum
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 and
plastic
 in 1982 and the changes over several decades in 2010. As a general trend, it is explicitly observed that
paper
 is the most recycled material with a peak of approximately 80% over the given period.
In contrast
 to
paper
,
plastic
 was
the
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one of the materials with a low percentage.
Overall
, as it is shown by the
graph
,
plastic
 ,
aluminum
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aluminium
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 jars and
glass
 containers experienced stable growth with
the
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time. In regard
with
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 the most significant increase
of
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graph
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,
paper
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the paper
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 was a major material in the field of recycling, accounting for a dominant of roughly 80% in 1994, which noticeably decreased to 70% by 2010.
Conversely
, the pattern is completely reversed, when it comes to the
glass
 container’s reclamation.To be specific, it witnessed
gradual
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 fall from 1982 to 1990 with a decrease of 10%,
then
recycling
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 of
glass
 rose to well over 50%.Interestingly, the rapid growth of the presented
graph
 belongs to the amount of recycling of
aluminum
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aluminium
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 cans.As it represented,
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percentage of
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aluminium’s
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aluminum’s
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aluminum
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 recycling rocketed to
a
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slightly over 40% with a
latter
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later
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 of approximately 5-6% by the end of the period.It
as worth-noticing
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 that
plastic
 recycling ranked
last
 in the occupied list in 1982 with a little over 0%, which gradually increased to about 10%
2010
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in 2010
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Vocabulary: Replace the words graph, paper, glass, plastic with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • recycled
  • materials
  • percentage
  • paper and cardboard
  • glass
  • plastic
  • metal
  • stable
  • noticeable
  • rise
  • significant increase
  • accounting for
  • consistent
  • ste steadily
  • dramatically
  • nearly
  • worth noting
  • relatively low
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