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Some people feel that children should be educated in single sex schools; others argue that mixed schools are better. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Education plays a crucial role in the development of a child and people have multiple opinions regarding
this
. Some people opine that student should be taught in schools only which have single sex schooling while on the flip side some people argues that they will be studied in a co-education system education rule. I personally believe mixed culture is the best opportunity. We will discuss both of views.
To begin
 with, some parents believe that their children should be in those schools which have only one
gender
 discipline organization because of several reasons.
Firstly they
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Firstly, they
 believe students can focus to their study only when they interact with same
gender
 in the class, with mixed education they make illegal relation with the other
gender
 and detract from study, parents have to face a lot problems because of them.
Secondly they
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Secondly, they
 feel children indulge themselves in more physical activities than in co-training, in a mixed teaching environment they spend their time in classes and have less interaction in physical activities which is not good for the health of a child. On the other side people argue that their off-spring will be taught in a co-study environment, it will help them to explore yourself and build up confidence. In mixed
gender
 schooling scheme students increase their communication level when interact with another
gender
,
this
 communication skill help them in future. They learn moral values and manner easily and it helps them in their after school life. Mixed curriculum provides a platform to students where they study with different
gender
 and some other things which are not a part of the curriculum. To conclude, both information systems have their own benefits. It depends on guardians which type of education they want for their offspring.
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