In some countries , the average weight of people is increasing and their levels of health and fitness is decreasing. What do you think are the causes of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them?

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Obesity has become a major trouble across the world. In many countries, people are too much dependent on technology and far away from physical activities, because of
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average weight of the single person is increasing tremendously. It causes many problems to them.
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with, many people spend their most of daily hours in offices which lead them nearly death to fatigue. To take some rest they prefer to sleep rather than doing physical activity. Another reason is they are too much used to of technology, whenever they have leisure time
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of doing any strength task they indulge themselves in different electronic gadgets which causes many problems to them
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as eye problem and over-weight. The Cambridge university research shows that an individual spend 8 to 10 hours daily using a mobile phone which causes
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and eye fluctuation problems. The reason is they have no activity related to physical strength. People should know the real value of physical work.
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the situation is still not out of our hand, We should encourage people to spend their free time on health task
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of wasting in other activities. Government should do campaign regarding to health, organized free yoga classes and motivate them towards body strength.
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is the only way we can decrease weight of an individual and increase their physical fitness. To sum up, over weighting creates many health issues for people as they have no interest towards physical activities. Few solutions that are mentioned above will be helpful to motivate people to increase their fitness level.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sedentary
  • obesity
  • overweight
  • physical activity
  • sedentary lifestyle
  • exercise
  • unhealthy diet
  • fast food
  • urbanization
  • modernization
  • stress
  • awareness
  • education
  • government intervention
  • policies
  • promotion
  • sports
  • fitness programs
  • health education
  • taxation
  • public transportation
  • infrastructure
  • parks
  • recreational spaces
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