Question: In recent years a large number of highly skilled professionals like doctors, engineers and IT professionals from poorer companies are leaving their countries for developed countries for better-paying jobs. What are the possible problems of this and what solutions can you suggest to deal with this issue?

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I will shed some light on the consequences of their migration and suggest some possible
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solutions
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for
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burning issue.
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, proficient persons are trying to move from their developing or underdeveloped homes for better wages and living standards. A recent study of migration
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that ,
plethora
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a plethora
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of Indian doctors, engineers and IT professionals are trying for citizenship and permanent residential status in
well developed
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nations
such
as
UK
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, Europe and Canada.
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salary range and recognition they will get in those places. The consequences of these transfers
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high, as the developing nations
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the skilled ones, they will
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remain developing only.
This
can lead to
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in
economy
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the economy
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. If the teachers migrate from the developing
countries
, who will teach the children and how can they become skilled professionals?
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such
cases, they may have to seek foreign
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, which can
also
add up to
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of their financial crisis. When Bangladesh was in need of foreign help, it pulled them
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hell of
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debt. Providing better living conditions and high
salary
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salaries
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as per their education and experience are the solutions for
this
issue, which can reduce a
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amount of shifting. If
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one gets wages
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to
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with their profiles, they would not leave their native places.
MOREOVER
, Creating more employment opportunities and
better
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living atmosphere are the solutions. Inviting foreign investments can create
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job openings. Accepting and adopting technologies can improve
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living standards.
For example
, some schools in India have implemented the technology of modern teaching and turned the classrooms
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modern labs, which has created a plethora of job opportunities.
To conclude
,
draining
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of skilled
person
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people
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from
under
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developing and developing
countries
will leave the nation in darkness. The officials will have to take action for migration in a way which is beneficial for both the professionals
as well as
the economy. Adequate endeavour for
this
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creating work and providing proper salary in accordance with their experience. I hope in future there will be a stage where no one
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to leave their hometowns, for job search and quality life. Except for some kind of emergency.
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