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people who buy friendly vehicles like electric cars should receive subsidy on tax.this will discourage people from buying polluting cars and thus lower emissions. discuss if you agree or disagree?

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Mankind, who uses electronic transport vehicles must be rewarded with a limited amount prize from
the
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The
government which
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government, which
 can lead to make least usage of travelling robots which is creating
pollution
. I totally agree with the depicted notion. In
this
 essay
Firstly
, I will be depicting about the harm that motors are creating and the step that
government
 must take.
Secondly
, we will be focusing on how
this
 act will be helpful for all human beings.
To begin
 with, it is wisely noted that humans are using motor vehicles, which are leading a huge
amount
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Amount
 of damage to the nature. So, people must
use
 some beneficial travelling motor
technology which
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technology, which
 should not impact the nature. Electronic vehicles are the best invention which allows the society to
use
 "Go
pollution
 free travel". Along with that, now it’s time to take a step by the parliament to and make
least
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less use
use
 of Petro chemical vehicles, by giving the subsidy to the owner of
pollution
 free
automobiles
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automobile
 users.
For example
, In India
government
 are promoting the go green transport motors to erg the
pollution
 created by the normal engine’s cars.
Also
,
parliament
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the parliament
 is giving the approach by rewarding 40% discount to the buyers of electric cars.
On the other hand
, by apply
this
 act there will be less
use
 of natural resources which can lead to
lighten
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Lighten
 the mother earth with its vast richness of
resource
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resources
the resource
.
Although
, many jobs could be
on
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at
 risk.
For example
, jobs like garage holders will be on erg but it will be beneficial
for
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to
 their
wellbeing
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well being
 because
pollution
 is making the earth life shorter by the time. So, what's the
use
 of
such
 jobs that makes our own life's at risk. To end up with my opinion, every
government
 in the world should pass an act that carries the slogan "Go
pollution
 free"by rewarding the discount or the cash prize for using the electric cars for the well being of the whole society.
Submitted by Jasbir kaur on

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