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What are the main features of developing agriculture?

#features #agriculture
This
 diagram is the information about is
agriculture
, manufacturing, and
business
 and financial services – to the UK economy in the twentieth century. These three sectors show us the development over the years. The
first
 chart shows 1900 years when
agriculture
 was 49%, manufacturing - 45% and
business
 only 2-3%. In 1950 the
agriculture
 increased by 2-3%,
business
 increased by 7-8%, but manufacturing decreased by 6-7%. If we compare the data of the 1900 sector with 2000, we will see the following:
agriculture
 decreased by 48%, manufacturing increased by 33-35%.
Also we
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Also, we
 can see that
agriculture
 decreased by more 50 % and in the near future we may lose
this
 sector altogether. Сlearly, diagram shows that the importance of finance and
business
 has grown over the past hundred years and that
this
 trend will continue to grow in the coming decades.
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