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In the last 20 years, there have been significant developments in the field of information technology IT, for example, the world wide web and communication by E-mail. However, these developments in IT are likely to have more negative effects than positive in the future . To what extent do you agree with this view?

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In recent years, technology in IT is likely to have more cons than pros in the future. I totally disagree with
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 notion since it makes our conversation easy and accessible , and using AI helps our studying style. One significant reason is that technology makes our lives easy and accessible.
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 means that if you have a smartphone or laptop, you can communicate with your friends and family whenever you want.
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, you do not need to worry about being late or a sudden change of the plan.
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, from my experience, when I was an elementary school student, I had to make a plan with my friends before we went home, because we did not have gadgets.
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, I have not needed to worry about
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 problem.
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, I could adjust my plan, even though my friend told me to reschedule or postpone. Another underlying reason is that using AI is very effective in our
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, AI can lead to our life better and better.
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, thanks to using AI, you can get a high score on your test.
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, you can finish your assignment effectively and quickly.
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, if you do not understand what your professor said, AI can solve
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, if you have a difficult question in your homework, AI,
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 as Chat GPT and Gemeni, can give you good advice. In conclusion, I am total disagreement that these gadgets in IT tend to have more bad effects than good effects in the future, as it promotes our conversation
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Answer the full question more clearly. Say why you disagree, and also show that you know some people may see bad effects.
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Make your main ideas more fully clear. Some lines are too general, like AI can make life better and better.
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Use examples with more detail. Your school example is good, but the AI example needs one clear real case.
coherence and cohesion
Link your ideas in a smoother way. Some parts jump fast from one point to the next.
coherence and cohesion
Keep each paragraph on one main point only, then explain it step by step.
coherence and cohesion
Check small word choice and grammar problems because they can make the meaning less clear.
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You give a clear opinion from the start and keep it to the end.
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You answer the topic and give two main reasons.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear start, body, and end.
coherence and cohesion
You use basic linking words like for example, as a result, and in conclusion.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • information
  • web
  • email
  • internet
  • online
  • access
  • learning
  • education
  • remote
  • work
  • job
  • business
  • speed
  • cost
  • communication
  • health
  • telemedicine
  • online courses
  • e-banking
  • privacy
  • security
  • data
  • crime
  • scams
  • fake news
  • screen time
  • mental health
  • face to face
  • contact
  • automation
  • digital divide
  • inequality
  • outage
  • power cut
  • laws
  • policy
  • digital literacy
  • skills
  • ethics
  • AI
  • effect
  • balance
  • policy
  • public
  • growth
  • development
  • impact
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