It is too expensive to look after and repair old building. This money should be spent on building modern buildings instead. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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world is changing rapidly as we pass year after year, things are transforming on a high speed through technology and advancement. The world is becoming progressively so old

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need

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and maintenance,

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development of new

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necessary for the

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if the

country

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. In below paragraph, I am going to discuss both sides, about

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of building and expenses on new building. Our

government

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always tries to take steps in the

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and development of the

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government

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support for modernization of the

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by spending

money

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on modern buildings with advance technology and facility,

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will help in

country

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growth

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as it will create new job opportunities and development of living standard.

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will

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help the economic

growth

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country

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as new office building will be built with latest technology. It's good to spend

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infrastructure

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by building modern buildings up to a certain limit.If

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government

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the government

only focuses on modernization

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that

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will lost its ancient

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and its old identity.

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government

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the government

should focus on

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of old buildings, so that they can save their cultural heritage along with modern buildings. As we all know with time, change is important,

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however with

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however, with

change maintenance of old things is

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necessary for our memories. To conclude, I would say

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government

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the government

should spend

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in a balanced form on both the things. Building new buildings is necessary up to some extent and

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and maintenance

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should be taken care alongside. Spending too much

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on one side is not worth full.

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Sentence 4 - Outline sentence

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Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

261 words

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It is too expensive to look after and repair old building. This money should be spent on building modern buildings instead. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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