Modern technologies have reduces social activities

In the modern world of technology, it is very hard to evade the gadgets which
provides
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provide
entertainment. Without any doubt, televisions have conquered most of our time. It has resulted in reduced social activities amongst the people. It goes without saying that televisions have made people sluggish. In older days, people used to meet and greet each other on numerous occasions. In the absence of high-tech equipment of entertainment, people prefer to gather at someone’s place and gossip about a particular subject matter.
In addition
to
this
, sports events were organized occasionally to maintain
healthy lifestyle
Suggestion
a healthy lifestyle
. Being unaware of the television had provided with an ample amount of time to engage in vigorous activities. At present, it is almost inevitable to move away from television. It has become a predominant part of our
lives
Suggestion
life
. Watching a movie or keeping yourself updated with the current affairs, it has dominated over most of our time. The social activities have reduced to great
extent creating
Accept comma addition
extent, creating
health problems. Sitting in front of a television has made people prone to various diseases. It is worth highlighting that
majority
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the majority
of our new generation has weaker vision. In purview of the above discussion, it could be
arguably
Suggestion
argued
ascertained that televisions have
effected
acted upon; influenced
affected
our lives in a way that it has made us inactive and unhealthy.
However
, we should create awareness about the excessive use of televisions amongst our new generation in order to engage them in healthy activities as well.
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