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Some people claim that what people eat in many Western countries is unhealthy and that their diet is getting worse. Critics say that these countries should change their diet. What are your opinions on this?

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In
this
 day and age the idea stated above has turned into an immense discussion, with many human beings holding various attitudes
toward thisthis
Suggestion
toward this
toward this this
 issue. Personally in my opinion I completely agree with the above expressed statement for worthwhile reasons lie in my viewpoints to support in
this
 essay.
To begin
 with, the main reason to consider is rooted in the fact that unhealthy
food
 in Western countries is affected by the
use
 of
technology
 in producing
food
 that mostly concerns on the quantity of the products as well as time efficiency but ignores the quality aspect.
As a result
, there are various kinds of junk
food
 and instant
food
 provided in several restaurants that obviously lack the nutrients as well as vitamins. The
further
 explanation which is capable of supporting the point held by me is that the
use
 of
technology
 in producing
food
 sometimes endangers people
this
 is due to the fact that the
food
 factory tends to add chemical substance inside of the
food
instead
 of natural substances. There are those who argue,
on the other hand
, that some researchers recommend people in Western countries to change the diet from modern
food
 nutrients, vitamins, minerals and calories. Yet, I am unconvinced that changing the diets will make people be avoided from the dangerous substance that influence the health.
Moreover
, even though people
use
 the
technology
 to produce as well as modify
food
 production, but by considering the importance of healthy diets individuals will
use
 it effectively and safely. In the light of these facts, one can conclude that in Western countries are provoked by media as well as the
technology
use
 in
food
 production that probably add chemical substance. By considering these factors, people should change the diets into the traditional
food
that is
 none naturally as well as healthier.
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