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Some people think "vertical"city is the best,where people live and work in tall buildings.Others think "horizontal"city is better,where there are few tall buildings.

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There has been a difference of impression regarding the topic that in contemporary society
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a number of skyscrapers increase without stopping all over the world.While some argue that horizontal city can be
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more affordable
most afford
 for living
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fearless believe that vertical expansion is better option in cities in terms of scarcity of plot. On the one hand
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understands
 why some people support the impression that horizontal city is likely to be constructed under rich with certain accommodations like private garden.
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these cities can be definitely a pleasure in terms of living and working.
For instance
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conventional house with garden will provide a myriad of free space which can be
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utilized
 in order to plant a plethora of trees and flowers
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as a result
 of which
such
 house is directly connected with nature. From another angle
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l endorse the sentiment that vertical building should be taken into consideration the best choice for living.As all people know
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in today's
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world, there
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the metropolis is
metropolis is
 where the housing problems have been overcome with the help of constructing multi-storey buildings.İn other words
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in most mega cities the matter of shortage of terrain could be solved and nowadays more people could be efficiently
accomodated
be agreeable or acceptable to
accommodated
 in the restricted estate area
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with
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too numerous to be counted
countless
 of skyscrapers.
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it is undeniable fact that in recent days the price of
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the continent
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therefore
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the large part of
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the population
 of countries cannot reach them
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however
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that
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the government
eatablishes
set up or found
establishes
 a myriad of high rise buildings is likely to have a chance
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of
 gaining a private apartment in terms of middle -class individuals. By means of conclusion
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even though there are certain justification for horizontal city
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l am of the reaction that in most urban areas vertical development is the best suitable option with regard to the scarcity of territory
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Heroic
 recommend that government should increase a number of skyscrapers in big cities and provide them with certain entertainment facilities like parks and museums.
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