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Many people believe that social networking sites (such as Facebook) have had a huge negative impact on both individuals and society.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Social networking sites, including YouTube and
WeChat
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, are sweeping all over the world to provide users across industries and cultures a brand-new experience that was impossible only a decade ago. As is with anything
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emerging but
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emerging, but
 engaging, social media is revolutionizing human society,
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 it innocently creates
some
one or some or every or all without specification
any
 side-effects. Social networking sites are connecting people of all walks across the world and turning the cyber space into a melting pot of ideas and inspirations. When a Chinese teacher who teaches science finds oil painting attractive and yet unable to spare some time out of his or her tight teaching schedules to attend an expensive course, they can follow an
influencier
a power to affect persons or events especially power based on prestige etc
influence
 who provide 24-7 free online course to hopefully learn the basics of painting. A new mother in Moscow, who, while chained to her responsibility of
breast-feeding
give suck to
breastfeeding
 her cute, newborn, has the easy and free access to nutrition programs designed and developed by best food scientists who are willing to share with all. Social media works like the catalyst that activates social-chemical reactions to benefit many who
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 are ripped off the opportunities. That all technologies are not without their side-effects
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are
 obvious. Just like the nuclear power can be harnessed to provide efficient and clean energy for millions of people at a relatively safe and lower costs, it can
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 be used to win a war magically. The same is true of social networking sites. If a total stranger in the name of your friend should ask you to help him/her out by clicking a link that leads a 10-dollar crowdfunding, chances are that you are being fished. Surveys show that every week there are over 3 million social
networkers
an interconnected system of things or people
networks
 who are cheated by someone they get to know via social media. That said, social networking solutions still represent something new and progressive toward a better world for us all. To conclude, social media is not without its problems.
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, its benefits for both individuals and society in large make me believe that it is created out of human creativity and to advance civilization.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • erosion
  • face-to-face
  • interactions
  • privacy concerns
  • data breaches
  • misinformation
  • polarize
  • cyberbullying
  • online harassment
  • procrastination
  • productivity
  • social isolation
  • dissemination
  • breeding ground
  • vast amounts
  • personal information
  • mental health
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