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Some people believe that one-on-one lessons are better for learning while others think that group lessons are superior. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Many forms of learning are currently used with students. While some individuals consider private learning is beneficial to the recipients, others believe that one-to-many learning is more constructive.
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 essay will describe why one-on-one lessons are very valuable for the students, but why
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 group lessons provide more advantages for the whole class. With the current lockdown situation, private learning became essential in every household. Almost all the students experienced the one-on-one learning with their parents or elder siblings. Many advantages raise from
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 way,
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 the student receives all the attention and explanation for himself,
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 he is comfortable in his own environment and will assimilate all the given information more easily. Eventually private learning will encourage students to focus and understand all given information in a smooth approach. But is it enough for the learner to practice the whole learning experience? Learning is not only about receiving and understanding new information, it
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 includes students’ interaction and practice in a large community. Group lessons will give students the opportunity to share ideas together and benefit from each other’s experience,
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 improves social and communication skills for all attendees,
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 increase each person’s self-confidence and self-esteem which will improve the decision making process for them. In the future, these skills will benefit future workers in the real life experience, especially in an effective work environment.
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, in order to give students a full learning practice, I think it’s very important to attend one-on-one learning once in a while, but certainly group study benefits will outweigh private learning ones and will be more beneficiary for them in their future life and work decision making process.
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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