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Some people think computer games have negative impacts on children. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Individuals think that playing computerized games can bring negative effects on children. I highly agree with that statement since
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 activity might bring several harmful impacts on children’s learning, health and mentality.
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 with, playing electronic games can make children perform their study badly. Since they spend a huge amount of time in playing video games, they have no time left to concentrate on lectures and assignments. As a consequence, these video game players tend to gain lower scores in semester exams than their peers.
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, Son Tung, one of the most well-known celebrities of Vietnamese youngsters, failed the Banking Academy entrance due to playing online games frequently.
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, children who enjoy playing computerized games rarely do physical exercises, which might cause some serious health issues
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 as headaches or strokes. Some recent statistics conducted by the Vietnam Institute of Psychology and Social Behaviour indicates that a child under 15 playing computerized games more than 2 hours per day is likely to have 17.6% higher chance of getting headaches or strokes than those playing under 2 hours. If it is so, these illnesses might make students suffer from a plethora of pain and shorten their lifespan.
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, video game players might have some problems related to
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. When playing Person Versus Person (PVP) games, players tend to be more violent than usual, which can result in numerous terrible cases. Take LeVanLuyen, the cruel culprit of a serious crime, as an example,
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 murderer confessed that he had made that murder because of been affected by the main character terrorist in some inappropriate computer games in his childhood. In conclusion,
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 agree that computerized games are considered a factor that can bring numerous harmful effects on children because of the 3 reasons aforementioned.
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