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Some people think that art is an essential subject for children at school while others think it is a waste of time. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

#people #art #children #school #waste #time
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It is irrefutable that
art
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 plays a pivotal role in overall development of a child. Some people opine that
art
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 is a crucial subject and it should be taught at schools. While others opine that learning
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 is a waste of
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. I do not agree with
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 argument. Through
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 essay I will cast light to highlight the importance of the arts. On the one side, there are different fields in the arts like music, drawing, acting and others. Nowadays arts becoming an essential factor in our day to day life. Children's focus and patience will get improved if they learn the
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 subjects. Kids need some relaxation after spending
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 on curriculum subjects.
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, they can spend it on learning the music or dance or others.
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, many people have the stage fear. Kids who have the
arts knowledge
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arts, knowledge
 they will definitely perform the stage shows and it helps them to get rid of it. On the other side, some people assert that
learnig arts
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learning, arts
learning arts
 like music, dance need lot of
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. If children spend the same amount of
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 for learning the Science or maths
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 they can get a good score, which helps them to get admission into better colleges for their higher studies. They will
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 believe that artists are struggling to survive in their life.
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the artist
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spends
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 of
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 to sell his paints. To put in a nutshell, having discussed the argument and counter arguments. Learning
art
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 needs a lot of
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time but
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time, but
 it improves the child dedication and sportive nature. I will recommend all schools have the
art
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 classes and encourage students to participate in those classes.
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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