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nowadays university education is considered very important for people`s future, however there are a lot of successful people who did not get higher education. Do you think that higher education is necessary to succeed in life???

#university #education #people`s #future #people #life
The graduation
certificate
, one of the keys
for
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to
brightness future
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a brighter future
brighter future
bright future
, it is
taken
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taking
 a highly
consideration
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considered
 by many people, at the present time, the requirements
to
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for
 higher
diploma
 has been sharply increasing day by day, but the against thoughts to these ideas are that there
are
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is
 really huge amount of people who have not finished gratification but they have
succeed
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succeeded
 the enormous consequences without higher education, I partially
agree the thought that
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agree with the thought that
 success is related to and based on higher gratification. In
this
 essay, it
is explain
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is explained
explains
 that why the
diploma
 important and why they are successful without
diploma
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a diploma
the diploma
diplomas
. To start
with in
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with, in
 the 21 century there are clear reasons for that the gratification is
so essential part of
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so essential a part of
 our great future, it has a big impact on our opportunities and successful career. The big corporation and tremendous
company
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company, for
for
instance Google
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instance, Google
 Microsoft, they provide people with
profession
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a profession
professions
 who have a higher education
diploma
, If you do not have it you may have some challenges with finding a job in present community. Again one example I have a
diploma
 but I
do not have
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individual
 any experiment about job and you did not complete the studying until the end but you have considerable experiment about work , in
this
 case in Uzbekistan only I can have a occupation you can not because of no
certificate
 of study,
On the other hand
however
 it is believed that without any kind of
diploma
 achieving success is possible , without any hesitation of course possible , the cause there are Many Billioner businessmen who do not have any
diploma
 but they are considerable successful in their career fields because of enough talents and special skill about business, they obviously know how to run a business they don’t need
certificate
 because they are enough well educated and they have wide over horizon, individuals can achieve enormous results with no
diploma
, it require a hard and continuous work To sum up,
although
 without
diploma
 every individuals can be successful, the higher education
diploma
 has a vital role in our career, without any doubt that we can exactly achieve higher results with
certificate
,
Submitted by Uralbek Begmatov on

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