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Some people say that cars are the best way to travel in a city, while others think that bicycle is better. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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Some consider motor vehicles to be the most effective method to get about in a city while others maintain that bicycles are the better option. In my opinion,
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 the benefits of travelling by a car cannot be ignored, bicycles are the key to healthier individuals and the environment.
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 with, some people highlight that cars carry luxury and comfort that bicycles cannot compete with. Cushioned, leather seats, built-in TVs and availability of AC, temperature control at a click of a button are a few of the things that bicycles cannot offer and one of the main reasons why people opt for cars.
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, travelling in cars is easier. You can travel anywhere in the city in a short period of time without distance, road or time being an issue.
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, despite
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 favourable amenities, bicycles are fascinating alternatives.
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, bicycles have a lot of positive benefits.
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, they are an environmental friendly option. Since they do not require petrol, they do not emit harmful fumes
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 as carbon dioxide that contribute immensely to air pollution;
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 reducing the amount of fossil fuel usage and preserving world’s natural resources.
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, as people cycle, they get fitter which defeats the sedentary lifestyle
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 associated with commuting by motor vehicles. Diseases
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 as obesity and heart problems can be drastically reduced by consistent daily cycling.
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, they are a cheaper alternative. Bicycle owners do not incur the extra expenses involved with having a car, including hefty car instalments, daily petrol and mechanical maintenance.
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 the prime reason why most college students go for bicycles. In conclusion,
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 both methods of transportation have their own advantages, bicycles are the better alternative for travelling in urban regions as they are healthier and eco-friendly.
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