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These days, many people have their own computer and telephone, so it is quite easy for them to do their job at home. Does working at home have more advantages or more disadvantages?

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In the recent technical era, almost all the masses access the electronic versions of communication. The people can perform an economical
activities
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activity
 from their living places. I think
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,
this
 trend has
much
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many
 more drawbacks as compare to the benefits. In my piece of writing
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,
 I will shed light on
pros
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the pros
 and cons of modern ways of working from home. More importantly, fewer human beings hold that the traffic jams can be dwindled with an introduction of the providing professional services at home. To illustrate, the mankind does not need to spend time on travelling for work places.
Furthermore
, the productivity curve of the workers
also
 tends upward because they feel free to perform activities and get rid from
unnecessary burden
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the unnecessary burden
 of an overflow of the rules and regulations.
However
, I think
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,
 the proper institution for providing services play a vital role.
Firstly
, the employees
get
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gets
 motivation by admiring the performance of their colleagues.
For instance
, the group of people, who work under a single
roof get
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roof to get
 inspiration from each other
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,
 which turn their mind compass to bless the excellent performance, while sitting alone at home in the front of the screen, a person can do much more qualitative work.
Secondly
, in the four walls of the domestic place, an individual always responsible to deliver household duties, by merging both personal and professional duties at a single place can create many and various conflicts and effects like hammer on the optimum production of the humans. In a nutshell
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,
 the computers are not
only source
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the only source
 of optimum production, there are some other determinants of
this
.
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