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The number of people shopping online is increasing dramatically. What are the benefits of shopping online? Are there any disadvantages?

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In the modern era, the issue of whether or not purchasing items on the Internet is beneficial has become highly controversial. There are those who say that the Internet is very useful to buy something,
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, others believe that it is not. In
this
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 essay, I will examine both sides of the arguments and provide my overall opinion. Generally speaking, there are two main reasons why people like to shop for products online. Perhaps the main reason why people are in
favor
promote over another
favour
 of
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 phenomenon is that it is convenient to obtain information associated with what they want to buy. To be precise, there are many specific
site
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sites
 on the Internet to post users’ reviews, which could help to purchase the commodities properly. A
further
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 point in
favor
promote over another
favour
 of purchasing online is the general public could buy cheaper items than brick and mortar stores. Shopping
malls online
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malls, online
are
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is
 the best place to compare the cost of various goods, which would make buyer price-conscious people. Despite, these challenges, it must be said there are
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 diverse disadvantages to shopping on the Internet. The principal drawback is that buyers could not have hands-on experience in advance.
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, they could not check the size of sneakers in detail, which would make them spend more time getting refunds.
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, the Internet would let the general public purchase more items than the amount of what they need. There are so many attractions like ads and discount events that people should not help buying only products, which encourages excessive consumption. In conclusion, it is clear
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 is a topic which is very relevant to modern society and it has advantages and disadvantages. In my opinion,
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, the benefits of shopping online outweigh the drawbacks. If people make good use of the features of the Internet, they could enjoy their shopping online wisely and properly. (306)
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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