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Band 4

Do you think it is better for students to work before their university study? Why? Share reasons and specific examples to support your choice.

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It is thought by many whether learners should be
worked
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working
 for
company
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the company
companies
a company
 while they are pursuing higher education. From my perspective, I believe that, working for from an earlier
age it
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age, it
 brings major development in students make them independent.
This
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 essay will highlight the importance of
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work
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working
 with suitable examples.
To begin
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 with, there are some reasons which motivate students to
work
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.
Firstly
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, working for an
ongranisation
the persons (or committees or departments etc.) who make up a body for the purpose of administering something
organisation
organization
 opens a door of experience for students. They would be aware of
work
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 ethics and useful skills which is required for the job and they start learning to acquire that skill while studying.
As a result
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,
this
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 skill would me helpful for them to get job in companies.
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for
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For
 example, to get a job in construction companies person should has knowledge of software skills which execute the plans on that software.
Secondly
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, individual become independent. He will be no longer a burden on the parents to
fullfil
put in effect
fulfil
 his needs or to pay his
tution
a fee paid for instruction (especially for higher education)
tuition
 fees. He will be able to accomplish his dreams with his talent and knowledge.
For instance
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, my cousin
brother he
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brother, he
 is working as a part time and he
become
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becomes
 the bread earner of the family at an early age.
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, it is proved by many that students who worked at an early stage are more successful. Since they become more knowledgeable and proficient at every sector. With
this
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 experience they utilise in making money worthy. They are aware of
work
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 ethics and become more mature to understand the business techniques. From a recent
survey it
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survey, it
 is proved that, students who
work
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 while studying or before studies. Most of them started their own business and expanded across the world with collaboration with other nation's companies. To recapitulate,
this
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 essay highlighted the benefits of working makes students more confident and independent in their life and taught to be more focused to achieve the targets.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • preparation
  • mature
  • responsibility
  • teamwork
  • communication
  • critical thinking
  • problem-solving
  • adaptability
  • self-discipline
  • time management
  • organizational skills
  • career exploration
  • financial independence
  • work ethic
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