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Abortion increases rapidly and becomes a controversial topic. Some people suppose that abortion should be legal while others are against it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays,
abortion
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 is
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 of controversial topics that discussed in our society. The proportion of
abortion
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 has increased rapidly day by day. It is considered that
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 of the main problems in the community. سome people think that it should be legalized by the government while others are opponents. In
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 essay I will discuss both points of views, and my opinion will stated. On
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 hand, people who believe that
abortion
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 should be legalized and parents has the decision of bringing children to life. No
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 can interfere
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with
 their rights to make
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 for the woman.
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Parents
 sometimes don’t want to birth child for many reasons.
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 of the reasons is that parents aren’t ready to take responsibility to bring up their infants for social and financial reasons. So it would be a big issue for them
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Therefore
 the official authorities should legal
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 under certain conditions and policies.
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, people who are against
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 for religious reason as they killed the unborn innocent baby.
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, in some cultures and traditions from a social point of view, they prefer to have boy babies than female babies as they think girls are not responsible of work and have not to own money and properties
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 To conclude, while people are debating whether to legalize
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 or not
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 is still continued a topic of controversy In my point of view, it is not correct to kill the innocent spirit of a baby for no fault of his own
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The
 government should legalize miscarriage under restricted policies for special cases.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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