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Road transport is taking over rail services. Discuss the positive and negative effects of this situation. Is this situation true for your country?

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In today's Era,
transport
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 is a burning issue. In our world
transport
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 varieties increase day by day like buses cars and rails. In
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 essay I will discuss why roadways and more popular
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then
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than
 railways There are many benefits of
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then
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 rails.
To begin
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 with, as we know that time is money so with the help of
transport
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 we can cover a long distance in short time.
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,
transport
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 is a door to door service so import and export is possible for any distance.
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Finally it
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Finally, it
 is the only
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transport which
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transport, which
 is
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use
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used
 for hilly area. On the downside, railways are more comfortable and cheaper
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then
conjunction used in comparatives
than
 roadways.
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Secondly there
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Secondly, there
 is no any weight limitation, we can carry any type of thing in rails.
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 transports are affected by bad weather like flood rain etc.
On the other hand
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, railways are not affected by any weather situation. In India, roadways take over the railways. In 1880s 80% people used railways and 20%
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 roadways
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 nowadays 80%
use
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 roadways and 20%
use
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 railways. To put it in nutshells, I pen down say that, roadways definitely take over the railways. There are many pros and cons of
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 situation that I discuss in the above paragraph.

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