Some people think that the government is wasting money on the arts & that this money could be better spent elsewhere. To what extent do you agree with this view.

Over the years craft was an integral part of our everyday life. A fair amount of people supposes that spending money on pieces of
art
with politics is unreasonable and can be invested rationally. I do not accept the idea that arts and crafts represent the detrimental effect on countries economy.
First
,
this
position will be proven by an analysis of educational level of society and
secondly
, the national property will be explored. For one thing galleries and museums determine social, educational attainment of individuals.
Therefore
, visiting
such
type of facilities, people observe the background of paintings, sculptures and acknowledge the history of masterpieces. Due to
art
people converse with others, share their opinions and
thus
, become more well-educated and versatile.
For instance
, the New York has published the curiosity article, which had shown that the level of education of the city positively alter with the increasing of amount
art
buildings over the
last
20 years. Another reason is that the investment in
art industry
Suggestion
the art industry
contributes to the national asset
fo
appropriate to; intended for
for
to
the country.
In other words
, behind those masterpieces is the hidden talent, who will be famous in the future. A lot of people will be interested in observing and enjoying the origin of the master and
hence
, it will be appreciated by them. France,
for example
, from the ancient times be formed by their artists and plant itself as the place of
art
all over the world. On the whole, taking all written above, I am firmly convinced that the government's wasting resources on
art
is political, whereas define the educational level of population and national value of it.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • enriching society
  • promoting cultural understanding
  • development of talent
  • creative industries
  • economic benefits
  • generate revenue
  • cultural heritage
  • identity
  • prioritize spending
  • needs of the majority
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